Champagning

Captivating

Attain the words

I’ve been

Finding

Fading

All the time

I’m just here

Watching

Waiting

While the earth

It keeps on 

Undulating.

Dissipating

I feel the urges

I’ve been

Hating

Fating

My future

Owned by

Mating

Bating

Transcending regulation

We continue

Anticipating

Time is not a unit of measurement

Just Hesitating

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  1. Phew – stunning pace here. I loved the use of no punctuation but at the same I felt as if it might have helped to slow down some of the most important words as I read through. Great job!

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    1. Thank you!

      I definitely agree with you. Originally I skipped the punctuation and used spacing, but for some reason I can’t seem to get a handle on the formatting for this site, and it all landed in a very strange way. I’m not sure what the rules are with editing after the Wednesday deadline, so I had to leave it that way:/

      I’m brand new to blogging:/

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      1. I know edits are allowed before and after voting but best not to during voting.

        I also have similar problems with formatting on my blog – gah!

        The spacing probably would work then without adding the punctuation 🙂

        Thanks again for sharing!

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  2. I liked how it felt like it was set to a beat. I actually enjoyed not having punctuation because I got different feels each time I read it. It made it very dynamic.

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  3. Formatting poetry in some of the wordpress templates is tricky. I find it easier to do in the HTML tab than the Text tab; that way I can see the formatting marks. I’m curious about that one period after “Undulating.” It makes “dissipating” part of the sentence with the urges, which then made me wonder if “fading” was meant instead of “fating.” But it also really spotlights the word in a poem where single words are often set off by themselves. I liked what the period did to describe the world and the passage of time.

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    1. Thank you so much for the advice on the formatting. I’ve been having a difficult time figuring it all out. Undulating was meant to be the last line, and then Dissipating started the next thought. Fating was the intended word there as well. I appreciate the feedback!

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